100,000 words in one head.

[elfs]

Writers often divide words into two categories: scaffolding words, and functional words. Scaffolding words are all the words we use all the time: "The," "is," "said." Functional words are those that actually move the story. You wouldn't use "hurtle," "admonish," "furious," too often and too close to one another because then they become repetitious and the reader gets the impression that your vocabulary is limited.

I thought about the difference between these two kinds of words when I came across the use of the word 'congenitally' twice in Sterlings. Polly (one of Rhiane's peers) uses it first: "Rhiane was congenitally incapable of caring about her appearance herself." And Tempany (Rhiane's commanding officer) uses it later again to describe Rhiane: "She's congenitally incapable of giving less than her best."

These two incidents are separated by about 50,000 words, which makes me wonder if I should bother cutting one out. I figure that's enough time for the reader to have forgotten the first one. But it's still one of those places where a Big Functional Word appears twice in the same book, and it's a standout word, so I think twice about using it.

Comments

[sirfox.livejournal.com]

in both cases, it also seems to be used metaphorically, as opposed to its biological nature... unless through bio-engineering, she's been born with an absurd amout of work ethic and little care for outwards appearances. I'd think of a better synonym for one of them, perhaps...

[sagittaria.livejournal.com]

Agreed. Perhaps "consitutionally"? And yeah, I'd cut one of them out altogether. Sorry.

[sirfox.livejournal.com]

I have to say, when reading a novel, if an author falls into a rut of re-using a certain term or phrase, it does bug me a bit. Not sure why, but it breaks me out of the reverie of reading, and gets my brain annoyed at word usage.

[anthologie.livejournal.com]

Anne Rice's use of "preternatural" is the worst one, for me.