Senryu #2, Haiku #4, Haiku #5

[elfs]

Senryu #2

To her you are gum
Chewed until drained of flavor
Stuck under her chair.

Haiku #4

Timber sinew strains,
Apple tree branches sweep grass,
Burdened with promise.

Haiku #5

Star-shaped scar on chin,
Muscley legs learning circles,
A child, a bicycle.

Comments

not to nit pick...

[tehrasha.livejournal.com]

Haiku #5... 6 syllables in the last line?

Re: not to nit pick...

[lucky-otter.livejournal.com]

It's loose form anyways - no nature imagery, no cutting words. 5-7-5 is just one way to write haiku.