Elf Sternberg

Travellogue, Day 12 (0916/194):
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("And seeing the way she shot out there," Shardik commented, "That's not something you want.") If this is a reference to the scene at the beach from "Travellogue, Day 9" there is a problem: Only Aaden and Kolya shoted there.

("It the one used by the Pendorian Diplomatic Corp.") "It's", not "It"

Asking Aaden (0916/206):
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In "Rats And Engineers" we learn that (Tasha had never been much for words or for coffee;) But in "Asking Aaden" it looks diffrent:

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Tasha leaned back in her chair and sighed. "Well, we're close, David. I'm going to get myself a cup of coffee. You want some?"
"Nah," David replied.
"You should learn to like decaf," Tasha teased him [...]

"Only in my worst nightmares," David muttered, [...]

[...] The mug found its place in a gyrostabilized holder Tasha had built herself [...]
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Asking Samuel (0916/213):
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("Now then, when I can secure groundside passage for my crew?") "can I" instead of "I can"?

Elizabeth (0917/019):
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Ether a word is missing or a "of the" is too much: (... through the soft frills of the of her dress.)
(... enjoyed testing them with her his fingers.) "her" doesn't belong there.

Proof (0918/115):
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("FIVE?" - Kiza laughed. "Well, you asked. It was a gangbang, after all. I think there was a Lutra, a Mephit, an Uncia-- or maybe a jock Felinzi, not sure-- and a Vulpin.") Might be on purpose... but this are only four.

(...Furry's hand a lifted it away...) "and" not "a"

Reunion, Part 1 (0918/141):
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The date isn't right. In "Travellogue, Day 3" we learn how old Nickolai is ("Sixteen, sir. I'll be seventeen in two months.") And in "Travellogue, Day 12" we learn when he will return to Pendor (You already have travel tickets made out for the day after your eighteenth birthday, ...) Based on the date of "Travellogue, Day 3" (0916/185) and keeping in mind the fact that a pendorian day has 30 instead of 24 hours this should place "Reunion, Part 1" somewhen around 0917/233.

(The hallways of the Off-Centaur were the same muted blue they had been for the past two weeks.) "Memories Breaking" 133 -> "Reunion, Part 1" 141 makes 8 days. -1 because the spacecraft started the next day in "Memories Breaking" makes 7 days, 8.75 if we take into account the diffrence between terran and pendorian days. Thats still not 2 weeks... And why does it take a week or two, when the Earth -> Pendor transit took only 3 days in "Travellogue"?

(He pulled the bewildered Felinzi until...) Garth is a Katckin not a Felinzi. btw... why is it sometimes Katckin and sometimes Katkin?

(Nickolai watched her as all of his feelings, all of his dreams of the past four years flowed through him.) Kolya and Furry know each other for two not four years... or is that on purpose?

Reunion, Part 3 (0918/143):
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("It's hard to say the play favorites, Nickolai.") "they" not "the"
("But that was they way things were.") same, only backwards

("I walked the Hall in '120.")
("A city was doomed without enough maintenance people in each category needed, be it sanitation, communication, power, infrastructure..." - "Don't you dare lecture me on what Terra needed back then," Greta exploded. "I was there.
120 is 2004. I don't think it will be that bad in 2004... not even in your alternative earth setting.